Paragraph Writing/Editing

First Draft

The animal sensor I think is interesting is U.V. sensors. U.V. is ultraviolet is part of light. Humans can’t see ultraviolet but bees can. Bees use it to find flowers.  U.V. sensors are amazing.

Second Draft

The animal sensor that I think is the most is interesting is U.V. sensors. Animals with U.V. sensors see ultraviolet light. Humans can’t see ultraviolet light but bees can. Bees use the ultraviolet light to assist them in finding flowers.  U.V. sensors are remarkable.

Peer editing-Mikayla

The animal sensor that I think is the most fascinating is the U.V. sensors. Incredibly Animals with U.V. sensors see ultraviolet light. Humans can’t see ultraviolet light but bees and a few other animals can. Bees use the ultraviolet light to assist them in finding flowers.  U.V. sensors are remarkable.